Jasmine Hart

Keturah "And you're going to have to be quiet! If this goes wrong, it's on both of our heads, remember?" Without waiting for a response, I glanced around, then consulted ...

I apologise in advance for this, and all the posts I make tonight. I'm forcing myself to write something, Brigid Shouts rang out across the deck as Oisin and Anchorless ...

Critique five of five. Haha. This made me smile. I'd change "fill" to "swell" for the sake of the rhyming scheme. Not as precise, I'll admit, but I think it ...

Critique four of five. This was amazing. I love your imagery. Was this originally part of a story or a play? Admittedely, I prefered Glitter's section. I loved the imagery, ...

Critique three of five. I really liked this. Your imagery was brilliant. The first stanza is great. I think I'd omit "the" as it delays the beginning, and I don't ...

Critique two of five. This one is very short, so there's only so much I can say here. I apologise for that, I just chose this one as you said ...

Ok, critique one of five, as promised! Firstly, this was really fresh and original. I loved the theme, and you told the story well. In the first stanza, I think ...

Hi. Not sure we've met though the name rings a bell, so I'm sure I've seen you around...actually, think I've run into you in the contest forum before... Anyway,that's enough ...

Lol. Yes, I felt it would be bad for me alright! Good to know. Thanks Surreal :)

You've obviously spent a lot of time on this story, so I think that it would be a shame to scrap it completely. What I'd do is I'd put it ...

I figured I'd start my own little thread here where I can write about my various projects, in order to monitor my own progress. Also, I reckon I'll start to ...

Keturah I rolled my eyes. "We're going to the palace." I wouldn't give any more information than that, not if I could help it. "What for?" He asked. I shook ...

Hmmm...I'm a bit stuck....

Yay, my first storybook post of 2008! Abigail "Em..." I looked down, willing my face to pale back to its normal shade. "No." I muttered eventually. "I won't go home ...

I completely agree with the morrow. Try not to get disheartened, everyone writes rubbish every now and then, and it's better to write rubbish than nothing, because you can't edit/rewrite ...